All Comments on 'Perfect Pairing'

I don't know if authors think their audience is clairvoyant, but I really wish that many of them would make it obvious what the sex of the initial protagonist is. It really makes a difference as to how you read the story. In this tale you get half way through before you know it's a woman talking (thinking). The story is not really a story; it's a fragment. Not bad, but not worth spending any time analyzing. 3*

Good story!

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I agree with Overcritical. Also, I understand this is meant to be short, but there is no transition to the last paragraph. So twice (the gender of the main character being the first time) I'm stopped in my tracks and going back to see if I've missed something. For a story of such brevity, that's too many times.

I too was confused at first with the gender of the storyteller, but it was ok. That just added to the mystique of the whole story. Well done, thanks for writing!