All Comments on 'Picture Perfect'

Great story! Although a great place to end this story, I would love to read more about them and their evolving relationship…. Perhaps her having her brother’s babies? Secret rendezvous? Coming clean to her hubby? Or maybe a threesome with her best friend and her brother? Perhaps a threesome where he impregnates his sister yet again, but also her best friend too?

Superb!

I think you wrote a great story for your first one. You might want to double check your dialog tags, there was a double up at the beginning.

Hopefully, the infidelity angle won't penalize you too much. I'm not a fan of that myself but the story was still good enough to earn 5* from me.

Excellent story especially for your first one. Please keep right them and posting them.

I loved the story, but cannot imagine her going thru a marriage with the intention of cheating on her husband now and forever after. I would have felt better if she was honest, and cancelled the wedding. Going ahead with the marriage is a disaster waiting to eventually happen!

great Storie. Needs a second part. I also think the best friend was sleeping with the brother as well and that why she di d not get married

5 Stars. I enjoyed the story, but have 2 requests or observations.

1) What is the sick fascination with getting every sister, daughter or stepdaughter pregnant? I know it's fantasy but please you assholes be a little realistic. Kids often ruin the figure of a woman. Plus the time young children take, it is unreasonable to think life is a fuck fest after child birth.

2) This was a sexy boudoir photo shoot. Ever hear of a garterbelt, stockings, and heels? I know heels were mentioned but never really addressed them in the photos or once the sex started.

Maybe it's just me, but a boudoir photo shoot means bra, garterbelt, panties, stockings and heels.

I bet a session with sexy Taryn getting pounded while her legs are in the air while clad in a garterbelt with stockings attached and heels on. Then how the garterbelt frames her ass while she takes cock from behind. How she looks like a sexy fuck slut while riding Roger's cock. Whipping her hips as she slides on his pole.

I loved that she drank his cum, but a big facial load would have been a hot addition.

Please don't follow up with Taryn getting pregnant. The idea of a threesome with her friend is hot. With both in hot sexy lingerie, bra, garterbelt, panties with stockings and heels. That's boudoir slut wear!

For your first attempt, this is damn good. The slow burn and surrender of both siblings were perfectly paced.

I'd love another chapter.

It will be interesting to see how the infidelity plays out, with the possibility of a pregnancy.

But take your time, like you did with this one.

Excellent first story. A few mechanics (typos, and missing apostrophes), but not so much to detract. Epilogues are hard to write, but give the closure the reader needs. It great that the brother and sister love each other; the epilogue also needed to resolve how she loves both her brother and her husband.

Great story! I hope this is just your first of many stories!

Fantastic writing. Awesome story. Thank you so much.

One slip-up

Upon checking in to the suite, Roger was concerned that the room had a west-facing window.

He wanted the natural light to shoot in.

In the epilogue (which should te the prologue to the next chapter), he mentioned her face

shining in the morning light.

The sun sets in the west and rises in the east. What was his lighting source?

Nonetheless, 5 ⭐️s

You had me until the lack of a decent resolution at the end. She needed to commit to Roger and let Brian go, or the other way around. Planning on a lifetime of cheating on both of them turned Taryn into a cheap tramp. Sorry to be so blunt and judgmental, but I absolutely hated the ending, after enjoying the rest. I didn't vote as a result.

Fantastic story! Encore.......

Fantastic writing. Absolutely loved it!

Fantastic first story. Hopefully, you will have many more. I totally get what it's like to have an idea in your head and finally get it out. The same thing happened with me and my first story, it took me years to complete. When it was finally published it was like a weight was lifted. Keep up the good work. Can't wait to see what you do next.

Fantastic story. Really well written and a great idea for a first story. Reading between the lines I think he had sex with Kaylie as well?

You're telling your story well. However, a cheat story doesn't go too well down with some of us, so the story ought to be tagged as such.

Good writing, good premise but the epilogue points to both her getting married and a possible romance with her brother. Unless the character is going to be a crappy person and keep cheating she would decide which one to pursue.

Awesome story! I love the build up. Please continue.

You're reading erotica yet you absurdly expect strict adherence to the Old Testament and the Commandments. Your hypocrisy knows no bounds—

Just dont see how teardrop shaped breasts could be called remotely perky. just barely attached to the chest by a bit of skin expanding down like a teardrop just flopping around?