All Comments on 'Picture Perfect Ch. 02'

Nice pace. Good follow up. Keep writing.

In front of a fireplace and having a cup of tea to warm the rest of the body since the story more than warmed up my soul. This is a perfect story with a perfect pacing all the while keeping it realistic and borderline diabetes sweet. A clear 5!

keep going give mike a chance to beat the shit out of the bully and have the bullies friends fear mike instead of making fun of him

You really sucked me in, great read. Shit, I even choked up a few times. The intimacy is also something that I find very well done.

As for your lack of editor, based on the improvements from last chapter, I wouldn’t let a lack of one slow you down. I write a lot for a living and I have to be right with the spelling and grammar. What works for me when I proof read, is I do it aloud and at a slower pace. It takes a little extra time, but works well for me and thought I would share.

Thanks for sharing and I hope the real world let’s you have the time to share some more with the rest of us!

i neeed more chapters stat this is by far the greatest story iv ever read on this site the emotional tie in to the characters is what makes so great and the fact its not a wam bam thank you mam story theres actual real honest plot here the story is actually going some where other than just the two main characters having sex end of story like you see a lot of on this site reminds me of the types of story's you used to find hone XNXX before the moderators destroyed it and drove all the good authors away

Hope there are more chapters to come.

Thank you all for the feedback! It really encourages me to keep writing for you guys.

Chapter 3 is currently in the works so please be patient with me! I promise to keep going as long as you guys keep reading! I am enjoying writing this story, I love the suggestions I have recieved, and will implement some of them in chapter 3 and future chapters.

To the people who think it's too slow of a pace, I dont want a Wham Bam thank you ma'am type story, the best stories I read on here made me feel connected to the characters and I hope my story does the same for my readers. I will keep the pace going at its current rate for now, at least the interaction between Steph and Mike, his confidence level will progress faster though.

Feel free to email me or leave a comment with suggestions, I will always take them into consideration if they appeal to my overall vision of this story. Stay tuned for more!

Please finish this story. It's so hard to find a great story with characters you can relate to and root for and that has a theme of love and not just lust. Thank you for resisting the urge to write what I call a porno script with partner swapping, gangbangs and making sure the parents get in on the action also. This is a love story between two people who love and care for each other. You wrote the brother to be a caring loving beautiful person inside with a scarred outside and a sister who truly cares and loves the man that just happens to be her brother. Good job of writing the sister in a light that shows she is experienced(being21) yet not a big slut the way some writers want the women to be big sluts and thinks it makes them sexy. The brother is well written also not shown to be the alpha male porno stud sex god. Will favorite you and check back to wait for the next chapter. Just some ideas but after completely finishing this story i think an extended universe of stories and first can be the story of joe and Sandra and their young love story and the hardships they faced. They don't have to be brother and sister if you want to stay away from the clique but maybe your creative mind can find a way to write an interesting story of how Joe and Sandra got to where they are in this story

I have finished chapter 3, it is in the editing phase now and hope to upload it in the next few days. Thank you all for your patience!

a beautiful love story! please continue.