All Comments on 'Picture This'

I'm not sure about this one.

The writing is well done. I'm not sure the story was well told though. I couldn't "feel" it.

For me, there was too much dialogue in an offering of this length. Perhaps lessening the dialogue and fleshing out the descriptions would make a huge difference.

I really enjoyed this story, and I'd love to see you continue it. If you are anything like the Cara in your stories, you sound like a fun lady. Of course, your presence on Literotica confirms that...

@thebuffalo, fair enough, and thanks for reading. As always, any constructive criticism is welcome.