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Chekovs Gun. Look that up and try to understand the principle.

There are simply too many details included that were never resolved. That's a distraction and causes disappointment in readers. You gave Stephanie way too much mysterious traits and behaviors without ever explaining the history. It seems you wanted the reader to recognize her as cautious and street smart. Why not just describe her that way instead of the inner voice musings on a dangerous and tragic past where she may still be in danger?

Chekov's gun principle: essentially, If on the first page of your story, you describe a gun hanging on the wall, at some point that gun needs to be fired.