All Comments on 'Playing Games Pt. 01'

I really like this start a lot. It has so much potential. That being said, this first chapter should have been much longer. Taking the time to develop the intense relationship between all three that is brewing. Then even giving the reader a tasteful experience before concluding chapter one. I've book marked to make sure I catch chapter two.

Great Start!

5 Stars!

Good enough start, but it needs another chapter, or two.

This seemed more like a prequel than the first chapter of a family in love.

thats it was to short no sex must be 10000 percent better

Keep going, there is potential here yet to be explored.

What the hell was this????????????????????? A 1

Excellent story with a nice buildup of tension! Please keep writing, as I think you can do very well on this site (or anywhere else for that matter )

It’s a good start. Be careful with the run on sentences. Keep writing.