All Comments on 'Playing The Whore Ch. 02'

Comments similar to Chapter One: your writing is excellent; the structure could be improved by resolving initial conflict while setting up for subsequent conflicts.

Also, a little proof-reading might help. Grammatical, spelling and punctuation errors distracted this reader. For instance: "site" should be "sight"; "jack" should be "Jack"; "to quickly" should be "too quickly"; "wonder" should be "wander".