by lkp0106
My name is Joshua, and it was fun to imagine myself in the character's place. Please continue the story.
Good begining for a good story. Ended as it should for a first chapter. Hopefully more chapters are to follow telling of Joshua's journey!!
I thought the writing was good, the story line good, the descriptions steamy and hot. Please continue with this story
Decent start but ends abruptly, just like a man who cums and then rolls over to go to sleep!
While there were some lines that could've used some work, this story has some potiental.