All Comments on 'Pocahontas'

I think you work too hard extending descriptions. Say what you would say in a 'normal conversation' and go on to the next sentence. Don't add surpluflorus extranrous words. (See what I did there?)

I would avoid the details of the murders, otherwise ok

Unlike the previous reviewers, I love the detail you put into the story. I would love to read a sequel, hopefully where Pocahontas takes the ghost woman away and gives her a baby.

What can I say, I really liked the story. I hope you have I'm mind a sequel.

And don't worry, for a first time it's really good. You just need to keep improving.

Best regards!

Please post a sequel to this story where Pocahontas takes over the whole colony and make all the ladies pregnant

Please post a sequel soon. Its an amazing story