by bbrake
Nice build of suspense, from a stroke point, slow but the premis leaves the door open for plenty of action. I'm waiting for the next chapter's.
Interesting first effort. Good characters and a nice build up. I look forward to seeing what you do with it.
Impressive first story! I enjoyed the poker game immensely, but was disappointed by the failure to follow up with a second chapter. One man and three naked ladies offers a plethora of possibilities, and I'm guessing that next Saturday's game would be even more titillating.
I noticed you posted a new story, and looked up your pen name. Since you wrote an earlier story, I read this one first. Ch. 01 usually means a Ch. 02. 5 years & no Ch. 02. You need to at least put an end to this story with a Ch. 02. It deserves it.
Not sure what the best way to continue this would be, but a continuation would be wonderful.
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