All Comments on 'Pool Boy Ch. 59'

Jarrod, Alexis, Hunter, Emma, Dee, Sophia, and Olivia need to form a bigtime corporation. Alexis would be perfect to attract clients and contracts (especially because sex sells, especially sex appeal), Jarrod handles technology and security, Hunter handles innovation, and the rest throw ideas and help them grow the business. Alexis and Hunter could use Eva, Erin, and Samantha as Bodyguards to prevent kidnappings and blackmail. They could use Heather to give them legal advice. They could spread their wealth by hiring Erin, Samantha, Heather, Noah, and others, who they happen to sleep with, because paying them and sleeping with them will give them incentive to stay loyal to the business and make it profitable. Eva could train Erin and Samantha up to become more than patrol officers or detectives. Dee and Jarrod have a daughter, she'll need protection, especially with Jarrod's business earning contracts and attention from law enforcement agencies. Hunter was going to school for engineering, maybe get him to invent something that helps prevent terrorism or help law enforcement or invent something that goes with a computer program or cellphone app and with Jarrod's help market it to law enforcement, the military, and the intelligence community. A 797 modified jet would be a prefect aircraft for their 20th Wedding Anniversary. Noah needs a job and a future outside pool cleaning, maybe use him as a pool boy and a bodyguard, especially since it would force him to get exercise and into shape.

I enjoyed this newest edition as well as the whole wedding events thank you for your hard and consistent work

One of the companies that Hunter and Alexis might want to create would be a porn company with their friends, including the SH5 and a number of the cheerleaders and football players that Hunter trusts forming the basis of the company.

I thought this was a thrilling chapter. I like the way you are building your story around Hunter and Alexis. Some one comment that you should get Alexis and Hunter into the porn business. THhat would be a huge mistake for your followers. They don’t need to get involved with smut and sluts. That has not been the charteristics of their life together and would be a wrong turn for them. Also, when they should not get into a business with all their friends and family. You could never have a good business when you are fucking all of your employees especially now that H&A are thinking of being more committed to each other. Let Hunter and Alexis build their own lives together and bring the friends and family in only occasionally as just that, friends and family. You are a good writer so keep up the creative thinking and keep it exciting.

Maybe a committed and potentially expanding polyamorous relationship surrounding them? There is so much love between the characters and a polyamorous relationship would be a great idea, especially if it's centered around Alexis and Hunter.

"Rap music ruined contemporary music for me." Hunter is what? 20? He grew up with rap as part of the mainstream culture. That is a line for a man that is very much over 50. It would have made more sense if you said he didn't care for rap and not like some old man who turned off the radio in the 90's.

That said, I'm glad you didn't present all the old references as something that's super common for young people like you usually do. I would like to challenge you to make at least one current reference next chapter. Anything. Have Alexis say she's behind on Riverdale. Because even young people who appreciate 70's era shit are still young people. I don't expect you to have characters saying "This is orgy is lit AF!", but be conscious you are writing 20 year olds. Not 50+ year olds.