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43 stories just on this site with the same idiotic, cliche title. A basic rule of thumb is that the title is a good indication of how much effort went into typing -- typing, not writing -- the story.

Too Rushed.

I'm confused

Confusing! Keep names straight and introduce each of them. What happened to John and Lisa. Are you writing it this way to find out who is reading it? I stop and head to the ending.

I barely got through 1/2 of the story and, sorry, I was too confused to continue....