All Comments on 'Possession'

Too much too fast. As if the author was trying to cram every experience into story.No time to savour her predicament. Longer descriptions of each humiliation please. Still quite a turn on though !!!

This is one of the most beautifully meaningful descriptions of submission I have read. The author is obviously very truly and deeply submissive, or at least, deeply understands submission! YES the submissive in the story should be incredibly proud of her tears! To be bound by direction, and not by ties, is such an obvious indication of true submission! Very beautiful!

I liked the gist of your story, but the writing of it is absolutely terrible. It is all tell, not show. If you would change that, it could be an amazing story, it has that potential. Right now it is a dry list of things you tell that, which is, frankly, boring.

It is the start of a good story but there's to much going on to fast. Author knows about submission but story does not flow well.