by RonanJWilkerson
Melody was there to 'fix' Daryl from his insecurities and hang ups. She knew this the moment Katie showed up in the food court. Her departure was a point of pride. Daryl was healed and ready to have real relationships with women.
I have to agree that you did improve and you totally kicked ass on the ending with your wording, your timing and on a personal basis you managed to hit me pretty hard emotionally with the growth and love this story showed in it’s incredibly well written characters. I look forward to enjoying more of your work and watching you grow even more as an author.
Lexx xoxo
"and we sat a listened" typo? A-> and? Or maybe should be "as we sat and listened" ?
"about an hour later," missing capital on "about"
(oh, Incase you're worried, I only bother proofing stories I like unless I'm actually getting paid for it, so this is a compliment).