All Comments on 'Pregnant with a Problem...'

Lack of punctuation makes it hard to follow, with several sentences run together. You're is short for you are, your demonstrates possessive. Not bad for a first attempt. Keep 'em coming.

The story was good, but there were a lot of run on sentences, missing punctuation, and grammatical errors. Fix those and the story would be much better and easier to read.

Agree with the other comments; your story is good overall, but I’d advise enlisting the help of an editor to correct any punctuation, spelling errors and assist with the overall layout of the text. Keep up the good work..

An editor will help, but they may make changes that change your intent. It's better to put it away for a couple of days then read it out loud. I catch my mistakes that way, then send it to an editor. Good luck and keep writing!

Thanks for all the feedback, will spend more time on punctuation and grammar next time and hopefully look for an editor.

Thanks !

As far as style I very much enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing :D