All Comments on 'Presentation'

Thanks for a nice debut contribution.

Some technical comments; feel free to tell me to get lost. The premise is really fun but the story doesn't flow as well as it could. It's often hard to tell who is speaking (the dialogue rarely comes with a "Rose said...") so it's easy to get confused and have to stop and deduce who is saying something. As well, sometimes the plot and action is driven by descriptive passages of what's happening but other times it's the dialogue itself that is telling us what is happening (not just what the characters are thinking and saying). So it's difficult at times to really get into the groove and flow with the story.

Again, great sexy premise, so thanks.

I truly enjoyed this story. The characters were well done, the story was hot without being graphic, and it made me feel great.