All Comments on 'Proud to be in Porn'

You use commas too often and incorrectly. Makes it hard to read.

I don’t think they were too embarrassed.

NOT

I don’t think they were to embarrassed.

Still, not a bad story, keep at it!

Too funny. Broke the family. First the brother and then the parents.

Sentence construction and punctuation used incorrectly made for a jarring partial read. Ouch!

It's weird, but this story goes into my 'sweet' category. Hot, yes, but also clean and almost innocent.

I like the story, great start hope to see more from you.

Learn the differed between of and off. Also this is quite common but clearly you do not know the difference between loose and lose.