All Comments on 'Public Shower'

you need an editor, spelling mistakes abound.

try to make your fiction somewhat believable

Present tense verbs make the story feel like a translation from another language. Good ideas, not good story writing.

***Thanks for the read.

Naïve writing, almost childlike in places, and too many errors.

This is a fun story, not to be taken seriously. Stop criticizing the spelling and grammatical errors. Think of it as a fantasy dream, a horny young man gets to share a shower with a sexy milf.