All Comments on 'Rain'

by MitchFraell

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
meh

i got to confused over which woman was which... you could have used names which were more different ann and lynn are similar and it just confused me... other than that it was a very good story but there wasnt much description about the actual fucking just what happened in between and it was a big lead up.. i'm all for setting the scene but get a move on

Scotsman69Scotsman69over 11 years ago
What

a lovely tale. Thank you very much.

StoryTeller2002StoryTeller2002over 11 years ago
Got rushed

Too rushed .-.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
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P L E A S E......bill

chilleywilleychilleywilleyabout 8 years ago
delightful story

Had to look up a couple of words and phrases (always a good thing) I presume "dry tossed his salad' means she played with his asshole with her fingers as "wet tossed his salad " means doing is with your tongue.

As a character, he didn't say much, did he. Might have been improved with more dialog

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 4 years ago
FUNEEEEE

Could have been in Humor & Satire, but then I probably would not have read it.

I read it because it's MitchFraell's highest rated story,

It deserves even higher.

I gave it 5 stars.

Towards the end, I got to thinking that the author fooled me into thinking that this was about the "voluptuous Lynn Blackstone." Which meant that I was fooled again when she was brought back into the story

-- in a surprising way.

Of course, a followup could have answered questions. Since Lynn knows, does Bob now get a turn with her? Or does he get to watch some lesbian action?

Or all three of them at once?

Having posed that possibility, maybe MitchFraell's tantalizing closing of the curtain was the best.

Paul in Oklahoma

AnonymousAnonymous10 months ago

Very erotic writing and interesting story. We’ll developed plot

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