All Comments on 'Ravage Me'

What did the phone ringing have to do with anything? That seemed unclear.

Never write again . You sick at it ya cum eater . Here is my used condom . Chew on that it is full .

Was there supposed to be any purpose or point to this story?

drinking flat champagne while reading a washing machine manual. Just rutting.

ne-er the couple should mingle. TK U MLJ LV NV

Ravish, not ravage. Unless you want to be beaten up.

Ok, Ok. I wrote this for my girlfriend as a quick e-mail and it is lacking in many of the facets that make up a good story, including character development (it was about the two of us, so none was needed). This is my first posting on Literotica and a learning experience, hence, my request for feedback. Based on comments from this and other stories, I attempted to redeem myself by improving subsequent narratives. So, I invite you to overlook this one and read my other stories since they have received much more positive feedback.

Brings back memories of and encounter with a very lovely woman I made love too in Vegas