I enjoyed the pace, the rhythm of dialogue, and the character development. The story moves forward at a tilt-o-whirl pace, and I can't wait to read the next line. Well-done.
'The world always seems brighter when you've just made something that wasn't there before.' - Neil Gaiman ----- Writing some poetry, and maybe a story, somewhere between light vanilla and dark thorns. Now and then, I throw in illustrations, mostly colored pencils. Somewhere...