by Xesevoli
good premise, but it was hard to read with the characters referred to as "girl driver" and "other girl" it sounded more like you were telling a joke that writing a story. that being said, im going to mcdonalds for lunch tomorrow to look fir these girls!irl driver" and "other girl" it sounded more like you were telling a joke that writing a story. that being said, im going to mcdonalds for lunch tomorrow to look fir these girls!
For a one-page (and a short one page) vignette,
it did the job/told me the story.
Wasn't much there.
What was there was good.
So ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
Paul in Oklahoma