All Comments on 'Red'

This was just a gorgeous story between the two of them, please will you continue with the their story, I'd love to read more (you've definitely set the bait with this one!) ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Odd that I could not rate your story - a glitch with my log in maybe? In any case, really liked what you crafted if a bit rushed and missing some character background. Both main characters seem real, believable. Maybe you’ll share some more of their relationship.

Aw, short but really sweet. Loved reading it. Thanks!

You have the skeleton of a really good story here. Don’t give your audience everything so easily. Tease us, draw your tale out a little more. There’s obviously a backstory lurking here. Let us into Emily’s head. Give us a glimpse, don’t show everything, of what was rattling around in her head on the flight. Did her sketch pad include drawings of Allison?

For a second chapter, maybe give us a hint of what Allison thinks. Is she struggling between owning Red and something deeper? See, so many possibilities!

fab.. a little longer, slower in the buildup might ahve amde it better .. my stories are under Lord Chilworth on here

Best story out today,! Weird dynamic but intriguing. Well look forward to see if there is more to this.

Really nice. These two obviously have chemistry and some history. Keep letting us learn more!

Very nice, I like the transition and reflection. Red, aka Emily has a soft side tomher it seems, a needy side which Ally draws out. I really enjoyed this. I would love, love, love to see these two engage further.

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Very good read. I am hooked now reel me in with more. It appear that there may been some history between the two even if not spoken out loud. maybe you can give us some of that as well as their first date and let us know how Sophie feels about it. It also sounds like Allison could be a little dominate and Red being a little submissve. tell us more. Thanks for sharing. 5 stars

That made me feel hot in all the right ways

Also where is part 2?

Made me wet.

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Nice story, not a slow burn story. I think you have the characters that can be created to be long term.

Loved it but I feel like there's backstory here, previous encounters that the protagonists ages don't work for... aging them up so that could work. Coming back from college rather than going to college, might be more plausible, or a bit of build up or context before suddenly the bitchy sister changes her mind