All Comments on 'Rediscovering Diana'

I do enjoy this genre and for attempting it I give you four stars. The vaginal hair was especially good for me!

Other readers will dwell on the dozen misspelled words but half are a separation by common language. :)

You have a style which I think needs to be honed or perhaps edited is a better term. One crutch you have is the word, "just." Using a search of your document will bring them up and the story telling will be improved if you restructure a sentence or even just delete the word.

Another thought I had as I was reading you is best said to be, too flowery. Excessive adjectives adverbs will detract by not allowing a readers personal memory and experience fill in. Once in awhile use under garments rather than panties and bra. In paragraph 11 you might use sensible as a style of underwear mommy is putting on.

Thanks for sharing