All Comments on 'Renascence Ch. 06'

Sweet. I am enjoying and tasting every word. Gave you a five, of course. More, please, Randi.

Loved it . worth the wait

I like what you did in the beginning :) That was a part I haven't seen yet, but it really fits to ground the reader again after the very sexy ending of the last chapter ;)

I think it was very important that you pointed out the risks of hteir relationship again, what keeps them apart as a reminder that they can't just fall into each others' arms and be in love however and wherever they want. It was also quite beautiful with the sunrise scene :)

The gormless part feels like you added that just for me :3 I love when you do this haha

Love what you adde for the plants :') It's such a small but ebautiful thing, it tells a lot about his character!

This chapter is so fucking beautiful, as much as it pains me to say, it was worth every rewrite :')

-Laura

i loved this more than many published books and series ive read

thank you

Amazing story, the way u write is beautiful!!! Will there be more??

I stumbled on your story from the romance portal and was immediately captivated by your tale of loss and redemption. Thank you for writing this for us. Thank you for sharing these wonderful characters. Most of all, thank you for sharing that ember of yourself. Yes, we see it...

And they're superb, just as the early chapters were. Nora, thanks muchly.

I envy you your ability to paint images and felt emotions with the words you use. What's fascinating to me is the difference in tone when Grace is alone, talking with us, the reader, and when she is with Gabe describing the things they are doing and the dialogue between them.

Truly an amazing piece of writing.

(And the story's pretty good, too.)

Again, thanks.

Lue

I’ll keep checking for the finale. Loved these characters

You are a very gifted writer! I love the characters & how well you describe them. There is a natural flow in your writing that I very much enjoy!

Just wow. Raw, emotional, tender, heart wrenchingly beautiful. I ached for Grace and fell in love with Gabe too! When I was 18 I was broken and didn't know it. I found my own Gabe, and when I did break he was there, keeping me in the light and love with his strength. This story resonated so deeply for me. You are a true artist!

Thank you so much Nora, you made me laugh and cry and feel so much with this tale.

Chi

Please tell me you’ll continue this story forever! It’s my favorite on here!

Thank you for your story. I love the way you describe, and touch us, with the deep feelings, and thoughts of your character. I’m not sure if Grace, and Gabe are going to get heart break, or happily ever after but either way it was a fantastic journey you took us on, with this story.

I hope you have many more stories left in you, to share with us, I’m a big fan.

K.S.

This would be a fine conclusion, very happy to see there will be more.

I love this series! Please keep continuing it, I've been waiting for chapter 5 and 6 for like a year now and it can't just stop there!

we need more

Looking forward to the final chapter.

Beautiful characters that pull a reader into an incredibly well written story. Brilliantly done!

A beautiful young freshman walks into class, and sits down behind me. Right then and there she decides what she wants, and the poor young instructor never had a chance to escape her. She was unapologetic, and unrelenting in her pursuit. She made his life hell for 4 years. There were closed door meetings with faculty and parents, she cost him his marriage, but in the end , she got what she wanted. They now have a string of kids, ranging from college to toddlers. She seems ,happy and he is now an administrator in the same school district. Funny thing I don’t know that she ever had a date in high school!!!

Wow... I never wanted this story to end. I want so much more! Your writing style is incredible and I found myself genuinely invested in this. I wish it were an entire novel!

You are an artist in the fullness of your prowess.

I make my way through your writing slowly, not sure if I should read, drink deeply of the prose and get lost in your words or if I should sit back, distance myself and appreciate each literary domino as it falls, pushing over the next before pulling back to view the entire mosaic.

A joy to read, some beautifully measured words but shared passionately with us.

I loved this story so much. Perfect amount of drama, romance, naughtiness, and redemption. Grace's voice was just so well written, it's impossible not relate to her, and I didn't want it to end! Thanks for this amazing story.

You are the best writer in Literotica.

If a writer is measured by the depth of emotion her story inspires in a reader, you are the best writer in Literotica.

If a writer is measured by how hard a reader hopes that she won't break the hearts of her characters (and his), even though he accepts that it is her story to tell and her characters' lives to control, you are the best writer in Literotica.

If a writer is measured by how often she inspires a reader to reconsider his life, you are the best writer in Literotica.

I really hope you'll continue this series and Head Above Water. It's really hard to find really good stories even more so a really good writer like you. You're honestly a rare gem

Your writing skills, your mastery of the language, your detailed research and obvious intelligence... that’s a combination that’s seldom found here or on any literary site. I think you ended this one perfectly... one may wish to continue following the adventures of Gabe and Grace, but the tapestry you’ve woven with your words leaves no doubt their future is secure no matter what obstacles may arise. Well done, Nora!

I fully concur with A_Bierce, you're the best!

Bar none.

All I can say is: "Fuck! I wish I'd written this!"

I sometimes like to think that I could write something significant, if I really wanted to. Then you read something as good as this story is and have to face the grim reality that you are just another stupid, small town guy that likes to read too much.

I echo your comments. Nora has a way of writing that I haven't seen before. She makes the reader feel the emotions. Even the sex scenes are different. Maybe because she is woman they seem sweeter, and softer as well as hot. A great series. I too hope she continues it. Thanks!

I'm in awe of your writing skill. This is one of the best stories I've ever read, and I hope you return to it for a few more chapters. Thanks!

I didn't take time to rate the other chapters because I was like an alcoholic trying to grab the next drink, I'll go back and rate them you're awesome!!

A touch of "Zen and the Art of Motorcycle Maintenance."

I'm amazed that a women of your young age can write like she has the experience of a much older lady. Simply astounding!

I'm completely in awe of, and in love with, the way you convey emotion. Having experienced some profoundly painful losses, though none of them occurred while I was in control, I felt the depths of their pain and struggles acutely. Thank you so much for sharing such a heart-wrenching/warming story with us. And, thanks for baring an intimate part of your beautiful soul. I hope to read much more of your work soon. And, I hope you are well.

Very good story. Wouldn't be great if we could all find our 'soul' mates? But then again we grow older, our soul mate has to move on the the next life and we are left alone once again with a hole in our hearts waiting to join them again. Our stories bring out so much emotion for a young lady, thank you.

I was actually surprised by you turning to Jung - I was expecting Plato (or, depending, Aristophanes), what with all the talk of soulmates. If I had a dollar for every time I was reminded that I should probably read more 20th century philosophy (slash psychology) ... I could probably afford to not work and instead do that. :)

There's a lot to like about the way you tell stories. Let me add a third thing to go with your dialogue (still a joy!) and how well you write pain (not sure "joy" is appropriate here, but you do it really well regardless): You write believable characters - who find true love at first sight, their actual soulmates, and who are probably slightly more eloquent and self-aware about their feelings and quirks than most "real" people in my experience are. And we somehow still root for them, literally at the edges of our seats, despite being a) in this particular story-niche and b) on literotica, where a really good rating often indicates a happy ending. If that isn't the holy grail of storytelling, I don't know what is.

If I had to offer any constructive criticism, I'd probably point to some of the introductions. Most of them helped me get immersed in the story, but the one to part 5 in particular seemed a bit ... artsy? Not sure that carries the right connotation in English, so let's say "complex just for the sake of it". I did read all six parts in a couple of hours back-to-back, which is clearly not how they were written or published, so maybe that's not actually valid as far as criticism goes.

(One last thing, because I don't know if it's illegal or frowned upon to bring up other authors in these comments - I personally found some overlap in many of the things I liked best about your stuff with OneHitWanda's.)

I am no expert or critic . So i will say what held me through the entire story was the incredibly long deep descriptions of every emotion . The connections and transitions were so vastly thorough and exaggerated . I could almost see them as I felt them . I have never read anything quite like it . What a gift . Obviously well read and intelligent . The run on effect that you like so much . Really works for your style . I hope to read more from you .

I'm ashamed to say I didn't read any of your stories until "The Oath Keeper". Since then I have read several, and am continuing to go through your library. All I can say is, Wow!

Don't let the commenter on the last chapter get you down. I won't name him, and he is entitled to his opinion, even though you never made any such claim. This is after a ll a work of fiction! I also got a chuckle out of his comment about the art teacher, since truly great teachers often use unconventional means to reach students (Hart? Hart?).

PS- waiting on Ch. 2 of the Oath Keepers!

is this the end? I cannot add more than the commentators below have said. Really high quality prose.

Pleaseeee finish this story! I feel like it just needs 1 or 2 more chapters to wrap everything up perfectly - though I definitely won't argue if you want to write more.... I'm just begging for an update. Please finish this & head above water! PLEASE. Your writing is phenomenal, and I love both of those stories so much. The characters deserve resolution.

I really enjoy your writing!

In this and your other stories the characters are fully fleshed out your depth of understanding is amazing.

Continue to bring us more joy; Thank You.

I absolutely adored this and yet I am so absolutely shattered that this story ended this way.

MOOOORRE!!!!!

I could agree with other posters about the ending, but I would also say that this is a good ending for them--despite the uncertainty.

I forgot to mention how useful a technique art therapy is for people reliving traumas and need to heal, something first brought to light on the show "In the Heat of the Night" with Harriet Delong. I'll never forget it, how she used painting to help a little boy remember the person who shot someone dead.

Pretty close match to the "emergency blizzard" mirroring their tempestuous lovemaking. That's hard to pull off, but a technique used well in a previous Colombian novel I mentioned.

I'm really late to the party, although I'm very happy to see this also won you an award. Well done.

This story leaves me super conflicted. Sure, I connected with the characters, rooted for them even. But it was all still really uncomfortable. Even leaving aside that he was her teacher (which is more than one kind of fucked up by itself), he's also 8 years older than her. At her age, that's damn near 50% older than her, which is super fucking skeevy. An 8 year age gap is one thing when both parties are grown ass adults (not technically adults but still fucking teenagers), at that age it is disturbing and probably makes him an ephebophile (as opposed to a pedophile who are attracted to prepubescent children). On top of all of that, she is also suffering from extreme emotional distress and clinical depression. She may be old enough to give consent, but she is in no shape to do so, and he knows that. While the ending is ridiculously unsatisfying, I'm also kind of okay with it, because there just isn't any way this ends well. He knowingly took advantage of her, and if she does heal one day, she'll see that.

This story hooked me right from the beginning, the metaphors, analogies, and poetry were added bonuses. I disagree with the whole "Gabe took advantage of Grace", nonsense as in my own love story, I was still in highschool when I fell in love with a 25 year old man. Grace's experience aged her and despite her depression, love blossomed. She learned to love herself while she fell in love with Gabe. The stigma around the teacher/student relationships aside, this was a beautiful story. In my opinion, Nora; you have the potential to write novels that could really resonate with the romance community. Please keep writing, you have more to give and we'll be waiting.

It's only a fiction and still so relatable. Probably too close to home... A few what ifs floating in my brain. I wish a Happily Ever After to those two broken souls who managed to fuse together. What a glorious Phoenix.

Another great series...

certainly worth an award,

A wonderfully wonderful story! I'll write more detail another day.

I really enjoyed the story. Thank you so much for all of the effort you put in to writing this. yes, there were some uncomfortable bits, it's true.

It’s been an interesting journey, leaving me wanting more. I want to know what happened after, I wanted to know if Grace went to college, how their lives developed. I invested my time and emotions in this couple and I was left vaguely unsatisfied.

Please consider a further episode or two.

So, so, good! I can live with the ending, but the selfish part of me wants to live in this story some more. Easily 5 ⭐️

Norafares is a great writer. Never less than 5* cuz at her best, her work deserves 10*.

Nora, I just can’t believe that this is your very first story. It starts out slowly but within a chapter it’s up to speed with your usual skill. I very much liked this story. It was romantic and realistic. The characters were believable and attractive. I’m just amazed at your skill at making them work. I can imagine a long life with them together. I just wish I had your skill.

Start to finish an excellent story, would love to see where else it goes.

Fantastic!!!!

Don't know if this is the end but loved it regardless. Would be thrilled to see all the loose ends tied up

Loved it. Loved the dialogue. Please keep writing

Quite a story of a love fulfilled and storm within a storm. If only real life was so passionate. It was for me for a short time but then it was ruined by a very selfish person. But life goes on and evens out and some of the passion dies and never comes back. 5 stars of course.

It is deep story written by a young master of letters. Nora captures the her young protagonist’s angst beautifully.

I love it. Will be rereading this and your others.

A truly poetic and romantic story. So sensitively written. The quality of this story is well beyond much that exists on Literotica. Nora is a writer with a great future and potential. Will now follow her on Amazon and contribute financially by buying her works rather than having them for free here.

Please keep on writing.

I know you wrote this quite some time ago, I hope that 1-you receive this and you're still writing because you are a "story teller" you have talent and a gift for making your readers feel your writing. Great Job

I absolutely was wrecked by this story. I was happy and then crying and then happy and it was a rollercoaster. Your gift with words and storytelling is epic. You brought me through a range of emotions and I loved every single second.

I'd love to see an epilogue of this some day. Genuinely one of my favourite stories, both on this site and off of it. You're amazing.

What a gift you have.

Wow.

LMJ

This is my second time reading through this series, and it's still as awesome as it was the first time. Thank you Nora!

Phenomenal writing!

This was not the kind of story I was looking for, or expected to find, but I am glad I read it, nonetheless. I am a slow reader. I read the words, letting them resonate in my head as the story unfolds. The poetry of the language I found here seduced me and engulfed me as it built the passion that was displayed for us, not just talked about. I was entranced. As the characters went about the tidal currents of their encounters, I cheered for them and feared for them. I was on edge so many times as they skirted the cliffside of discovery and disaster, yet they persevered. So hard to believe that so many family members, coworkers and other students saw nothing, suspected nothing, did nothing to interfere. Now I have another author I need to follow and experience. I need more.

Well, if the story had an actual ending I'd likely be rating it five stars, but it doesn't have any conclusion, it just kind of cuts off. Sorry to see it, it was written in a poetic way that I enjoyed and I liked the main characters. I see that the author is still posting new stuff so I can only hope that someday she'll revisit this and give it the conclusion that it deserves.

Perfect.

Literary erotica doesn't get any better than this.

But it won't surprise me at all that you would try to surpass the unimaginable.

Again.

Salvation and tender mercies. Tres sympatique, the thunder and rain. (Who knew?) The relief of tension, the relaxing of the cosmetic fake front used to avoid the expected public and families outrage as corrupting the youth. (May the cup be passed...)