All Comments on 'Reporter Lucy Profiles CEO Ch. 01'

I see a nice set of stories from this short intro! Well done so far Ms Lucy!

To see the story continue!!!

The piece is very well written and you have begun to create interesting characters. And with the story line ending so quickly I’m interested in enjoying more of where this may head.

Love the story so far! Hope it continues!

Such a great start for a continuing story Lucy, keep it up.

Great start! Just one thing, though. I think you failed to save your draft at some point, because in the middle of the story you switch from a narration in the past tense to one in the present tense, as if the you abruptly stopped editing.

Excellent start!

Nice beginning. Lucy is engaging and Nathaniel will lead her into his realm expertly I expect. I agree with the commenter who noticed your shift of tense. That is fine if you do it intentionally, but it should be calculated and create a change from memory to current action. Keep up the good work.

Nice beginning. Lucy is engaging and Nathaniel will lead her into his realm expertly I expect. I agree with the commenter who noticed your shift of tense. That is fine if you do it intentionally, but it should be calculated and create a change from memory to current action. Keep up the good work.