by WerewolfatNight
Please, if it is at all possible, continue the storyline with Jeff and his exploits in this fantasy world. I'm really impressed with the diverse characters and situations he gets himself into.
You are an excellent writer, and this experienced reader appreciates the wonderful work you put out. My only question is can you get out the sequel for this soon? SOON! PLS!!
Dude, this story is great. My only complaints are that the chapters are too short, and the gaps between them too long.
segue is a skill, where you show the passage of time, or change of place, or something else. it is handy with reading. you need to learn it, so your writing is less choppy and is more smooth. it can be words, or it can be a line of dots.