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by hyperdog

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 month ago

Your writing is a victim of breaking the golden rule - show don't tell. You can write with eloquence, but this feels like the synopsis to a great story, not the story itself. Let the reader discover the story as the characters do, through their experience of it.

GardeningGirlyGardeningGirlyabout 1 month ago

Great Lovecrafian cosmic horror story!

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