All Comments on 'Romantic Vacation with My Aunt Pt. 01'

It was good but the sex was rushed. It needs a little work. I am still looking forward to the next chapter.

Oh, please learn English before continuing! This was just too difficult to read. 1* is being generous.

This was horrid, unimaginative, and basically unreadable.

Don't get an editor. Get an education.

end with her pregnant!!

It is impossible for me to enjoy a story when the grammar and spelling are so awful

I think some of the comments are harsh. I think we can tell that english is not your primary language ? Or was this translated ? Some of it didnt make sense and the flow was off.

Please increase your vocabulary so that you can more accurately describe someone rather than call them ugly

It is a farce to call this a romantic anything with the bedroom antics you describe

Dude, get an editor. You need help.

Honestly don't quit your day job

Boring .

ESL and an over dependence on "Spill Cheque" gives you ............ The above two paiges

You seriously need an editor. The writing detracts from the story!

plot is fine -- need to work on your writing!

All right, maybe it was not the best written story, but it contains enough for you to use your imaginations and make the correction's where needed. Give the writer time to perfect his composition, i.e. Spelling and lay out. We all had to start somewhere in relating readable events in our stories. I am 91 years of age and am a duffer at spelling, always have been. I am sure that our friend tried his best and his next efforts will improve.

With regards to you all.

The Old Codger.

I agree with all the other comments

English is not my mother language and I checked my grammer and vocabulary many times. I can't believe you are telling me I did spelling errors, it is impossible. I used the word "and" so many times I accept. Please make more consructive comments guys.

To the author. It is a good story, but has some English Grammer issues. Not spelling errors. Since English is a second language for you I would recommend an English editor.

Some examples of errors is the continuous uae of Aunt instead of she on page 1 of 2.

Bet you kept fucking your aunt wonder did you knock her up too

There was a lot of grammar issues I understand that English isn't your native language so as someone else said my advice get a editor or proof reader who's native language is English other than the story was all over the place first he isn't attractive to his aunt then suddenly he is getting jeoules when another guy pays attention to her I mean seriously he needs to make up his mind

No! Just No!

Get an editor