All Comments on 'Rules of Their Own Ch. 03'

These journeys to years ago keep slipping me the vibe that Alex is an asshole who kept using his power to use people and now karma has finally came along to bite him on the ass.

Well, I do hope that you continue the series. Now, we have Ana and Alex together but what is Nela up to? The constant flipping between present time and the past is a bit difficult to reconcile but nice that there are breaks to distinguish the differences. Will we find out why Alex is not able to control Nela totally? Please continue but not so long between chapters.

You saw an author do something you found cool and you're imitating them blindly without first working out why it works, and consequently, when it won't work. It's useful when you're building tension and the very timely reveal of the past adds to the tension of the events of the present. All YOU're doing is messing up the pacing of the two stories and not getting anything out of it. You jump too often. Stick to one story segment and tell it in it's entirety.

I did not get the idea from another author. This was a commissioned story and my hands were tied on the narrative formatting as the person commissioning wanted a past and present story.

Loved this series..hoping that you will continue it

Waiting for the next part!