by ualmech88
Absolutly the best story i have found anywhere on the internet. i think that you left the ending open so that if the story was well liked, you could add a second chapter. Everyone, is telling you in one way or another...
Great story, theirs was a match made in heaven. Well written and had a storyline that flowed well. My only complaint is the story ended before they got married, had a family and lived happily ever after. Well done 5-stars
Ray needs to be a daddy and Amy needs to be a mommy and his wife. By not using her and abusing her, he found a wife, loving worker at the dealership, and her new name was mommy. His was daddy...
Wonderful story. Someone please pick it up and make Amy, Mrs. Amy Blanton, loving wife and mother of Ray's three children...
WONDERFUL STORY. SOMEONE PLEASE PICK THIS UP AND SEE WHAT HAPPENS. AMY MAY BE A YOUNG WIFE AND MOTHER, HELPING HER HUSBAND AT THE DEALERSHIPS AND PROVIDING A HOME LIFE OF LOVE AND CHILDREN. NOT LIKE BECKY!
I really enjoyed this story, it had interesting characters, good buildup and was easy to read. When Ray took Amy to pick up her belongings I about busted a gut laughing when Ray told Bill, "Shut your mouth you bully!". The bully part was just so out of character and not what I was expecting. Maybe ass hole, SOB or bastard, but not bully. I don't know, maybe I'm just being too critical, anyway Ray did redeem himself when he called Bill a "piece of shit" :)
Well worth the five stars. Thanks
Enjoyed the characters, the build up! Great story telling! Thank you!
I enjoyed this story greatly! I had a mother-inlaw that was carded until her late 30's, so to the reader who didn't like the young look, it does happen in real life.
I hope you will write a sequel to this one that's maybe 5-10 years later.
I hope it gets better for both of them.
So many negative experiences make the romantic moments hard to appreciate.
A well constructed and laid out story, it was inevitable that they would find comfort and love in each other, but you unfolded the story seamlessly. Hope you keep writing storiesof this calibre, I will look out for further submissions from you. Regards Cherpee
They are adults, looking for love, after a bad experience for each one, and they find it altogether!
5* for you.
I apologize for my English, is not my native language.
Very sweet and erotic. Some spelling and grammar errors throughout, but nothing too major. Still, you'd probably benefit from an editor. You can also use the Hemingway Editor website; it's done wonders for me. Well done. Score: *****
Liked the way the passion built slowly along with trust...enjoyed this!
The passion between the two grew as the story progressed. Age is nothing but a number. As long as they are both consenting adults who knows how far they can go.
Thanks for sharing.
A thoughtful simple story with good people surviving the bad things in life. It addresses many of the issues that cause emotional harm to men and women with a pleasant ending.