All Comments on 'Saint Patrick's Day'

The basic idea of the story wasn't bad but it certainly needs editing. Would have been better if it had been rewritten a couple of times before uploading to the site.

have read this one if it was not listed in LW. 4 stars for the story, but I agree that it needed MUCH editing and proofreading. Too many players to keep everyone straight.

Normally I don't complain about the odd grammatical error but in this story there are a LOT of errors and it made following the story impossible. Maybe a good editor could save it.

This story was hard to read with two many people involved, two many grammatical errors, and just poor form. Have someone proof read it first the next time you try to write.

While your comments are valid, it’s a little disingenuous to comment on another’s grammar when you don’t know the difference between two and too. Once can be passed off as a typo, but not twice.

Couldn't even finish this story. Too many people to follow, didn't make sense. Did nothing for getting me in the mood.

patty day

Too many grammatical errors and characters, I give up!!

Cheating whore fucks everyone.