All Comments on 'Sand'

To many typos and grammar issues. At least run it through Grammarly

For the read.

I thought it was very good and I want to know more about Kelli.

Can't wait for more;

Well written story, but could have gone on to write about her flight and how they missed each other, or phone sex.

Kelli is a good bit more mature than him so definitely correct category.

This is potentially a relationship with a good future. They need a quiet afternoon in a big bed. I think about them having a deep connection, No lubrication needed, starting slowly and growing bigger, and better for both. I'm getting a hard-on just picturing them. This is hot stuff. What do y'all think?

Bob

Excellent beginning! Needs another Chapter or 2. Thanks for the entertainment.

I liked the story and want more. But, please don't draw things out too much. Maybe two more chapters?