All Comments on 'Sarasota Bar Blowjob'

Good premise for a story but the writing is terrible. Use some quotation marks for the dialogue, check your spelling (wholly shit?) and clean up the grammar.

What was that? No story just a random bunch of words. So the female character is a cheating skank. Does its husband know she is cheating is that what the video is for? 1☆

I'm glad you started by saying that she was your wife. It still wasn't enough to make this a Loving Wives story, but it puts you a step above quite a few of the other clueless newbies who post inappropriate stories in this category...

Wife gets divorced. Get an editor

I live there, which bar? Let’s have a repeat!

Really?

Please learn to use quotation marks when writing dialog. Thanks!

Pointless no ending just a phone number

What the hell was that? How does it feel to piss away the opportunity to introduce yourself with a decent story? No, you choose another worthless cheating skank story with so many mistakes I couldn't get past the first half page. Come up with something interesting to write and get an editor. Maybe people will read more of what you submit.

I also wonder which bar... SRQ has so many..especially out in the village

Whatever!

Well, a good story/imagination, but you REALLY need to get someone to help you with the writing. No way would you have passed my 7th grade writing class

Cheating cunt wants more.

I agree with most of the other comments. Writing was simplistic and primitive. Not erotic. Not even interesting. Gave you 2 stars for the idea. Not going to bother reading your other story. Moving on