All Comments on 'Saturday Night Five Ch. 08-09'

absolutely loving this story! Leo needs to clear the air with Katie and Annie though IMHO

keep up the great work!

Yes!!!! New update!!! Now to read it!!!!

Spectacular! Rose getting better every chapter

Amazing! Please keep this journey going! have literally not closed this tab down, always checking for the next release!

Your other chapters have been 5 stars, this was more 4.5 in my opinion. I’m going to focus on things I think you can absolutely improve/get back to because you’re an incredible writer in my opinion. Lots of men could never write teenage girls and you’ve done a great job in making them believable and giving them voices. Especially Rose. Also, I loved how Milly summed up Tayla. That was succinct and insightful to the nth degree.

Where my critique is I think the sex scenes this time were rushed. Your writing seemed at a faster pace, and I get it, it was a NYE quickly, but you have a true talent for writing great sex scenes. The BJ bathtub scene before with Rose is already an all time fav of mine and I’ve read on this site for 10 years now. Don’t deprive us of what is your best asset other than being able to find a young female voice

It would’ve been better if Rose took him by the hand and they left New Years early and then had sex at the house where they would be comfortable. Even wild girls like to be comfortable and a shed isn’t as desirable or even as thrilling as the empty house where they could get caught by returning parties. As well her not wanting it to be a quickie.

P.S. the jerkoffs Foley & Tanner shouldn’t have been that easily over powering by just grabbing his arms. Got to put Leo in a real submission hold unless we want to see him as a 98 pound weakling. And I vote he get revenge himself on Foley & Tanner to restore his pride.

And here’s some creative suggestions from me just get ideas going: Let him and Katie talk it out. Don’t even necessarily cross him out Re-hooking up with her or Tayla if the right opportunity comes. You can advance this fun plot forward while he can have tons of sex in side plots.

Especially with Rose. She’s so hot and seductive that I want to see as much of her as possible. They should at least have that shower scene! Lol.

But he can even have a study date with one that’s completely in the middle of the plot and just have a sex scene with her.

Maybe have a competition between the girls he’s tutoring. Winner with best exam score gets a great date and maybe two of them tie.

Definitely explore the other girls from these rival cliques. I think I can guess how these circles formed with rival alphas gathering followers but I’d love to hear how Rose & Tayla gathered the other 3.

Have one girl have a birthday and Leo does something very nice for her.

And if your plan is to have him end up with Annie, then keep teasing us with it. Keep it cooking. To where eventually he makes the move to get her. Because the first 3 girls have been the aggressors and I liked how with Annie, he was the true aggressor. I actually would love for him to go on a camping trip like you teased before. There’s just so much potential here for the greatest senior year ever piece of writing that I think almost of us wish we had before going off into the adult world.

I’ll add anymore ideas that pop up later.

Good story. I can't wait to see what happens in chapter 10. Leo should tell Annie what happen to him when got locked in the bathroom and who did it and see what Annie does. Should add some pregnancy scares yo add more spice to the story

Heyyy just wanted to say that plot is amazing no doubt, but can you focus lil bit more on describing sex scenes and if possible can you also show lil bit freaky sides of any girl like into anal or some other kink, also would love to see what will happen between anne and leo but before that waiting for some excited scenes and it's weird that katie have totally sideline herself, ALSO ONE MORE REQUEST PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE CAN YOU POST LIL EARLY BECAUSE I SERIOUSLY SEARCH EVERYDAY FOR YOUR NEW UPDATES THAT MUCH CRAZY I AM FOR THIS SERIES ahahahahaha but seriously like instead of 1story per month can we get 1 chapter every 2 weeks please if it is possible. Ps:love ya❤❤

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Newww parttt whennnnnn

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