All Comments on 'School Bully, My Hero Pt. 01'

A very short chapter, but a good start. Looking forward to more.

Good start please continue

Luke it so far just wish it was longer since I liked it do much . Please continue

I like thick eyebrows like , it gave me hope of a very hairy girl , haired than him , can't wait to read about an romantic humiliation story of boy and hairy girl or futa fall on love

Way too short... Needed more to go on. See where it goes from here.... We're watching

a little shorter than i was expecting but i enjoyed the first chapter

Way too short, has a good start but too short to tell where it could lead.

Looking very much forward to next chapter! Still curious to wether Sandra is a shemale, or little Billy will turn into one as it is pretty clear he is not gonna be the man in this relationship! :D Or maybe both? Looove the big size difference between them. Great start man, but a little short!

Honestly this feels even less complete than your previous submission did, and that already felt rushed and incomplete, as if elements were omitted last second.

Normally a short story is not a bad thing, but there's a limit to how short a story can be and still be considered a story at all.

There wasn't much detail at all, not much background. It was basically setting up the backstory with a preview of a story.

Your attention to detail is very good, and the story itself shows promise. I sincerely hope that the next chapter is extended and shows more confidence in the writer.

If i wanted to read a teenagers first day of school diary entry i would ...

Too short. Keep going

I like short stories. Looking forward to more details,