All Comments on 'Seatbelt Violation'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago

Omg that made me so excited. I want more

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Needs work

I like the NonCon element but it needs more build up, more description of what is happening - his intention and her real reaction. You can't just say he shoved his cock into her ass and get no reaction from her. Have you ever had anyone shove their cock up your ass?? It hurts! It hurts like a mother*ucker!

I don't mind that it's dark or violent only that it's poorly written. It reads like it all happened in 30 seconds. And there is no way that description ends with her liking it. We're missing something - let's have it.

Good effort though - likely scenario.

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