All Comments on 'Secrets of The Tea Room Ch. 17'

Please carry on with this splendid story, I can hardly wait to get to the end!

The excitement, the dammnation of the bad are all as should be! :-))

Thank You from

John

Because this was a look back, we knew that Rose was going to be rescued. This did not lessen the excitement though. Jackson came through like a classic hero. The book is nearing completion so the end of the story is in sight and I for one, will be sad to see it end.

There are so many grammatical and stylistic errors in this. It spoils what would otherwise be a good read. Examples:

Style

The next week she listlessly performed her duties at the Tea Room,

would be better as

The next week she performed her duties at the Tea Room listlessly,

Grammar

Later that morning there was a knock at the door which woke us up.

needs at comma or two.

Later that morning, there was a knock at the door, which woke us up.

Did the door wake them up?