All Comments on 'Seduction of Innocence'

Wrong category! It should have been in the "Lesbian" section. Second, a written seduction should be a slow burn in which you are attempting to seduce the reader, a tease so to speak, as your main character seduces the victim. Finally, cliche' subjects such as "seducing the 'babysitter'" are overdone. Find a different plotline with some rejection, reluctance, and resistence to make it feel as if a real, artistically manipulated seduction had taken place. Good luck in your future endeavors.

Hmm my dearest, I love this new story which hopefully you are launching into a series. I knew it was would be as tantalizing as you hinted. Just a wonderful read. I can’t wait for more my friend. 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

Excellent as usual. I also hope this is the start of a series.

Loved it. 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

Spectacular characters and well written story. It would be a crime to not write a couple of sequels to this adventure.

I agree with amepacul’s comments. You did rather plunge straight into the story without ‘rounding out’ the characters. It’s tricky dealing with the age 18 cut off for stories on Literotica. It makes it harder to develop a ‘sexual awakening’ in characters like Tori. (The age of consent for women in Britain is 16). I’m not advocating under age sex but perhaps you could have spent more time at the beginning tantalising the reader, with Tori’s innocence. Another angle would have been to make Tori the seducer and Pam the hopelessly conflicted and besotted older woman; an altogether different story I know. In any event, you showed a talent for erotic writing. I particularly liked your sensual descriptions of their lovemaking so five stars from me.

Wrong category and you need an editor desperately.

Naughty naughty Madelief, very naughty story. I loved it of course.

Very nice. I'm looking forward to the next chapters.

Oh my. What rich wickedness as Pam introduces Tori to the world of Sapphic pleasure and delight, a world young Tori had been desiring for many months. Please tell us how Tori responds to her new mature lover.