All Comments on 'Semen Transforms Girl’s Mind & Body'

Your vocabulary is impressive, but simpler language would make the story easier and more enjoyable to read.

Pt 2

There is a time and place for elevated vocabulary. This is not it

The first three sentences, somewhat nonsensically also the first three paragraphs, had me laughing out loud, and realizing this was not worth finishing, even if it did all fit on one page despite the author's lack of knowledge with respect to grammar and structure.

@all

Duly noted. Thank you for your inputs.

Yeah. The eloquence is somewhat droll after a time. Also having the entire thing told by narration lost me as well. Zero dialog makes for poor immersion. Concept is fun though.

I thought the language was on the right track, it painted more of a self-prophecized saviour _with a history_ rather than the commonly happening isekai boy first steps. The grand picture doesn't come together though. How does he get away with it. What does he have to gain from blind thralls obtained previously. Are the saved girls effectively plucked from society and lose the options and variety in life.

Been reading "Three Square Meals," have you?