All Comments on 'Seventeen'

ok?

It shows potential. I’d love to read a longer version of this. Though I would recommend some proofreading and maybe run it through Grammarly. Some of the text is a bit hard to read.

Cuck.

Was this supposed to be a story? You know story and stupid aren't synonyms.

I agree with 1mm0r3l1n3 on both points. Some back story would also give alignment to the 'family dynamic.' Having read, I understand that the family is fully familiar with one another; the aforementioned back story would/could have cleared that and give clarity to the dynamics assumed.

Happiness is a loving mother and wife who holds an anal gang-bang record that the rest of the family can be proud of!! Fucked-up but fun… and I enjoyed it!!