by Galloglaich
But I find myself hoping that Tom ends up with Tyrin.
Sure, she's got memory issues, but it also seems like he's helped her -- albeit only very little -- with that.
On top of that, while she may certainly be demanding, it's not because she considers him beneath her, or anything -- she's more like a spoiled child in mind than a person who is truly domineering.
Also, she's adorable. I mean, come on, "Wonder about me." -- that was brilliant.
I know you like writing somewhat submissive MCs that fight back. That being said in the story so far the MC is too passive. All this plotting and he is just kind of tossed into the middle of it. Give him some power or something. Make him interesting. Right now he's a mouse fighting a cat. He has no chance, but if you made him like a figurative ferret or squirrels the fall would be a lot better. You can't write a fight masochist if he has no chance. Give him a leg to stand on if you plan on sweeping it out. Sorry for the passive aggressive title just feel kind of let down you left me hanging for so long. Glad your back though man.
The love story between Vender and his baphomet made me cry! You have created such a rich canvas to work with, truly one of the best stories on this site!
this is my favorite series on lit and i’d really be thrilled to see another chapter
Love the story and the crossover with Jack. Kind of not sure how I feel about him saving the succubus, but I can understand him not wanting her tortured. Jack's appearance could add another element to the final conflict.
This story seems to be just another couple of chapters short of being concluded.
A real shame it was left here...
Wow! Yet another good story by an author, who chooses to publish but not complete it. How disappointing. It was so enjoyable up to this point, and then you leave us hanging without a conclusion.
I am truly tired of starting stories that do not have endings to them. Thanks for nothing.