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I don't get the Anonymous who said not erotic.
Earlier it was erotic interruptus. But both the masturbation scenes and the intercourse were erotic.
I hope you publish some more.
Love the humor and the buildup. Wish for detail on what it feels like to have your pussy fucked, beyond “I feel so full” or “his cock stretched me” or “I felt his semen hit my cervix”. There must be more to be said about what seems to be a wonderful experience for women who write about fucking. Need more detail please
My suggestion is...write some TV sitcom spec scripts.
NOTE: Some essentials. A story is about A CHARACTER WHO WANTS SOMETHING, AND WHAT HE/SHE DOES TO GET IT.
And...Aristotle was right. The story begins with the character doing something wrong.
And getting away with it...until the end...when The World Is Made Right Again...On TV,
at the 8:55 Hug.
See: The Kingfish...Alex B. Keaton...The Fonz
You're talented at this.
It had an honest feel to it and the connection between the couple was beautiful. Great read! 👍
A very enjoyable read and a different offering to most posts ,funny as well as being very plausible.
Many thanks for your generous comments! I really enjoy writing dialogue.
The structure of people talking, the shifting versions of memory, literally excellent thinking and writing
Gotta be the best dialogue I have seen in decades.
Thank you.