All Comments on 'Sex with Jennifer'

This story is stiff and boring. Not the least bit erotic. I feel like I just read an instruction manual that was poorly written. Sorry, Man.

this was the worst story i have ever read in my entire life...try again...

See spot bite Dick. See Jane laugh. See Jane Grab Dick. Hear Dick moan. Dick and Jane and Spot have fun. ... Be advised that sentences can have more than a single idea, that is what commas are for. Premise of story is fair, but lack of cohesion and too many periods ruined it. Quite boring, actually, it sounded like it was written to teach kids how to read. Read about punctuation and try again.

This story was horrible. No detail at all, no real reason to care about the characters, and no real grasp of erotic writing. Go red lots of the How To articles before you try writing again.

your wording and sentance structure was...odd

Some people have a limited experience of reading. Yes, it's different, and Yes, I liked it. It had a very distinctive style and was a brave attempt at something different for this site. Congratulations. And yes, it was erotic too but then eroticism is more in the imagination than having everything spelt out to you.

I thank you all for your comments.

Being dislexic I may have problems with grammar...and "word" spell check is robotic.

Sorry I can not write and speak USA but I am not and more cultured.

But my stories have a large amount of truth...they are. Not just fantasy crap!

Bigman2

Your woman was Dominique Francon meets Lolita. Your style was "Nine and a half Weeks" meets "Some Girls".

The minimalism was beautiful, entrancing and enough. Thank you for sharing it.

Poorly written:The conept was great but the continuity was terrible. Short choppy sentences that could have been written by a 10 year old. Learn to write and try again

total waste of time very little incest jumps all over the place very confusing too many people involved and no body has any feelings for each other.