by Emerald_Dragon
The complexity of your story line is growing with each chapter... i like the way you draw out the personalities a little at a time.
I have an editorial suggestion. Your conversations would flow better and be easier to read if you used 'contractions' instead of writing out each word to it's fullest. as an example:
"Yeah, well I guess I will have to get the chainsaws out then," said Finn only half jokingly.
^^^ Yeah, well I guess I'll get the chainsaw out then!" said Finn, only half joking.^^^
I'm enjoying this story very much, please update soon?
Great update. It's nice to hear that Isobelle is starting to heal physically from her experience. And I liked the concept of her using her art (sketching, etc.) to get some of the painful images out of her mind and onto paper. <br><br>
As to Ian trying to unlock the mystery of Cullen - that should be very interesting. I like the slow development of both characters very much, and the introduction of interesting side characters (Finn and Simon). Great job.