All Comments on 'She Almost Got Away'

HER Adam's apple??

Well Damn!

"What she seen in him"...... come on! Get someone to help you with your grammar before you post a story. I stopped at this sentence. It's like scratching a chalkboard. I'd correct it and resubmit. Your story sounds interesting but not with grammar mistakes.

I can't tell if this is purposely written with such bad grammar as a story-telling technique, or if the author writes that way all the time. Not that interesting, in any case.