All Comments on 'She Takes Control'

Good story line, needs to be developed further with more detail, describe what they did to each other, what he did when he joined them

Apologies for my slow response. This is really good feedback. I think we deliberately took it a different way. As in the original fantasy had far more detail and my gf and I found it more fun when we left it vague and therefore we could imagine different scenarios. First time I published and I guess that wouldn't work for other people so well. Maybe I should do a choose your own adventure from the dozen encounters that gave rise to the story!