All Comments on 'Shoreline Secrets'

First and foremost, thanks for writing and sharing your work. I enjoyed reading your story.

Second, I think that you would do well to study the descriptions of the categories here on Literotica, and read a couple stories in different categories. This story probably belongs in Erotic Couplings, not Romance. Most of the stories in Romance involve long-term relationships and the changes that occur over time, while your story describes one encounter. You’ll learn a lot about writing by reading different stories in various categories, too.

While I don’t notice anything incorrect in the story, the paragraphs are very long. Shorter ones are a bit easier to read. I also think that it might be better to have some dialogue, rather than relying on description to tell the whole story.

I look forward to reading more!

thank you Davester37 . I will try to improve my next story based on your inputs