All Comments on 'Signals'

EXCELLENT! MORE, MORE!

Well written and hot. Thanks.

The phrase is "with a grain of salt," not "like a grain of salt."

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This might have been a hot story, but there is far too much detail of each person's physical characteristics, what they're wearing, what's on a desk, etc...

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1. Readers don't need every detail spoon fed to them. Let them use their imaginations.

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2. Let some of the details be revealed more naturally throughout the story instead of rattling off lists of details. I found myself skipping whole paragraphs and then skipping to the end to see if the story even eventually gets anywhere.

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It's a good early effort. Work on developing a more natural style of storytelling where the reader is given details as they become necessary to the plot and can get drawn into the action instead of reading checklists of details.