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by pumpkineater2

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AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago

Very good begining, more please!

Epiphany_JonesEpiphany_Jonesover 9 years ago
Intriguing beginning for a story.

I'll point out one thing, though. Consider it a suggestion. The "drunk" dialog might help to set the scene, but it can also get tedious after a while. You might consider toning it down.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Stop with the Blarney

I agree with Epiphany Jones. It makes the reading tedious, and it's not very clever as you might think.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
zz

The dumb drunk bit ruined this .............

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
First "Anonymous" Gets My Support.

I think it is quite tittlating, and I am looking forward to more of this tale.

TigersmanTigersmanover 9 years ago
Good for a laugh

This story is good for a laugh. I get the feeling that both parents don't know if they should laugh or cry, thus the booze.

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